Have you ever encountered this kind of thing? Have you already written it? I have. Bloated and redundant prose. Take the latter, for example. Facts by their very definition are honest. Adding “honest” as a qualifier is not only unnecessary, it adds no value. Worse, it undermines the intelligence of the writer and insults that of the reader. They are likely to Latest Mailing Database raise an inquisitive eyebrow…questioningly. That's the subject of a delightful blog post written by Marcia Refer Johnston, writer, educator and author of Word Up! How to write powerful sentences and paragraphs (and everything you build from them). Full disclosure, she is also a friend and mentor to yours truly.
Hope this is crystal clear. Enjoy. The Annals of Redundancy Annals: 650 Sentences to Ponder You can repeat it Have you ever dove into a book with relish? Scratch that. Digging in says "with relish". Have you ever dived into a book? The other night, that's exactly what my husband did. He had heard good things about it. He was looking forward to Latest Mailing Database reading it. He adjusted the lights to read, settled into his recliner, put his feet up, and gave the author what every author dreams of: undivided attention. A few pages later, he threw the book in the trash. Why? Because it was filled with distracting and redundant writing like this: And yet , thought the man in a contradictory way...Double duh! First, man thinks of himself. Who else would he think of? We don't need him himself .
If the author had stopped at “ And yet , thought the man”, my husband might have finished the book. And if the author had stopped at " And yet— giving readers the satisfaction of finding that the man meant those words — my husband could now recommend this book to Latest Mailing Database his friends. Eight Words. Two words. Eight words. Two words. I could add "weigh the hands", but you don't need this visual-verbal redundancy: you are already imagining the hands. Here is an example of visual-verbal redundancy that comes directly from my mailbox: envelope" See inside for details." Someone paid to have this line printed. On an envelope. The envelopes, in their very envelope, let's say, I envelop something.